Look, I'm sure this review will get removed however I feel that 1) it is valid (The author of the materials impression of it's audience, if negative should be changed in order to make the game better) and 2) needs to be said.
I've seen an influx of games from "allforgirls" or "gamesforgirls".
For starters about all these games are dress up games and don't have a whole lot of depth. Or really anything going for them. They seem like a way to make a quick buck off ad revenue, not on providing a quality flash.
Secondly While I hate to be that guy who calls the sexism card, I feel that this is one of those cases. the moniker of the submitter says it all. Why should a game be defined based on gender? The point is to submit something good, and given that I don't assume that my standards are somehow arbitrarily defined by my gender, then the assumption that this game will only appeal to girls implies that the creator feels that either a) all guys will hate things that are cute. or b) all girls love cute things. Neither of which is a very appropriate assumption.
Are these games just not "for" me? is that why I dislike it? or is it because they are attempting to disguise a total lack of anything resembling valid content beneath the argument that they are just "4grrls"?
For starters was the song even necessary? I mean it did nothing to further the message really. That said, if you choose to use music please choose a higher quality file, dear lord I guess if I'd used my laptops speakers I wouldn't have noticed. but I wasn't so I did.
Also the "animation" is basically flipping between still images.
The message was disjointed at best, the information you wanted to convey could have been conveyed much more quickly and concisely, rather than through your ramblings.
Also I don't think Jesus(I'm assuming that's who was depicted) had anything to do with purchasing pardons, that was the work of the papacy if I remember correctly.
Excuse me if my interpretation of this is incorrect, but while the idea of a memorial to someone is sentimental. I'm unsure as to why it should/needs to be published. Memorial status doesn't seem to confer instant acceptance onto NG, as such it should have to stand on its own animation/sound, however there really isn't any of that.
I guess you got challenged to use the voice so if the hair's laugh was more annoying than anything else I suppose I can only hold you half accountable. That said, poor voice acting in certain places can really ruin a piece, something to keep in mind for the future.
Finally work could be done to make thsi piece more substantive.
Find a more original idea, I'm not meaning to be harsh but if I waned to play bejewled I would just play bejewled, A reskinning of the game while a fun project to flex your coding muscles is fine. But that doesn't necessarily make it newgrounds worthy.
artistry, needs work.
Coding is beyond needing work, hell I've programmed better in Qbasic after minimal time spent with the language.
sound? what sound, artistry is still bad, oh did I already mention that? well it needed restating.
And to summarize, you have momentum when you jump! you continue to move forward despite the fact that you have in fact gained height. I'm not sure what you are expecting by resubmitting this piece.
the animation was kinda bad, the music works out i guess. Although I'd be concerned that mission impossible would be too played out.
However the game has no perspective, prior to opening the door going east leads to a window, however after attempting to open the door it leads to a portal.
This only serves to confuse the player. and destroy any handle they had on the game world.
A good flash in my opinion relies on both content and animation, sadly your flash was lacking in both. there never really was any animation, and the images tended to bounce around a little bit.
Also what was that bird thing that stabbed patrick in the end?
probably the best thing you could have done for this would be to have a friend (or yourself) do another voice for bill murray. while I know it wouldn't be the best impersonation, it might just be better than microsoft sam.
I think that the flash did a decent job of capturing some of the emotion behind the creation of the song. however this comment is less about the author or his work and more about the people writing reviews.
It seems like newgrounds reviews are rapidly increasingly turning into vapid hrose-shit. take for instance "this is the best song ever !!!!!!!1111111" illuminating no doubt but the comment leaves me with a feeling of emptiness as if gee I don't know they failed to provide adequate criticism. additionally (and this is a general rule) to all you people out there who think you are some sort of music critic because you've heard like 30 songs in guitar hero 3: you aren't try learning about the bands and their reasons behind making a song.
I really find yendor87's comment legitimately helpful in this regard because not only does he call out all the GH music idiots he also points out that its ridiculous for some stupid trendsters to hijack a sogn about war and death and loss. for the record this song is not about angst, or mommy and daddy not loving you, its about a man who has returned home after watching his friends killed and now finds himself distanced from everyone around him. This is not emo self imposed exile this is a song about real emotional/physical issues.
in the interest of avoiding additional rampant hypocrisy I will now proceed to review the flash itself:
the concept was a decent one, I appreciate you leaving paint it black open to interpretation your format didn't force a specific main character or setting upon us allowing us to project our own emotions onto it, the surest beginnings of good art.
honestly your biggest flaw was that your flash only covered half the song, this could be a result of course limitations so don't think its a personal problem.
Let me stress that a 7 is in no way mediocre it is merely a way of saying that it was decently better than average and something that held my attention and interest.
in short: you unlike a large number of the reviewers have garnered my respect.
commonprotocol
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Rated 0 / 5 stars November 13, 2009
To call it a game is to stretch english.
Look, I'm sure this review will get removed however I feel that 1) it is valid (The author of the materials impression of it's audience, if negative should be changed in order to make the game better) and 2) needs to be said.
I've seen an influx of games from "allforgirls" or "gamesforgirls".
For starters about all these games are dress up games and don't have a whole lot of depth. Or really anything going for them. They seem like a way to make a quick buck off ad revenue, not on providing a quality flash.
Secondly While I hate to be that guy who calls the sexism card, I feel that this is one of those cases. the moniker of the submitter says it all. Why should a game be defined based on gender? The point is to submit something good, and given that I don't assume that my standards are somehow arbitrarily defined by my gender, then the assumption that this game will only appeal to girls implies that the creator feels that either a) all guys will hate things that are cute. or b) all girls love cute things. Neither of which is a very appropriate assumption.
Are these games just not "for" me? is that why I dislike it? or is it because they are attempting to disguise a total lack of anything resembling valid content beneath the argument that they are just "4grrls"?
Rated 1.5 / 5 stars October 29, 2009
Extreme disconnects
For starters was the song even necessary? I mean it did nothing to further the message really. That said, if you choose to use music please choose a higher quality file, dear lord I guess if I'd used my laptops speakers I wouldn't have noticed. but I wasn't so I did.
Also the "animation" is basically flipping between still images.
The message was disjointed at best, the information you wanted to convey could have been conveyed much more quickly and concisely, rather than through your ramblings.
Also I don't think Jesus(I'm assuming that's who was depicted) had anything to do with purchasing pardons, that was the work of the papacy if I remember correctly.
Rated 0.5 / 5 stars October 28, 2009
not sure if this is the correct place for this
Excuse me if my interpretation of this is incorrect, but while the idea of a memorial to someone is sentimental. I'm unsure as to why it should/needs to be published. Memorial status doesn't seem to confer instant acceptance onto NG, as such it should have to stand on its own animation/sound, however there really isn't any of that.
Rated 2 / 5 stars October 28, 2009
so-so
I guess you got challenged to use the voice so if the hair's laugh was more annoying than anything else I suppose I can only hold you half accountable. That said, poor voice acting in certain places can really ruin a piece, something to keep in mind for the future.
Finally work could be done to make thsi piece more substantive.
i see, im planning on puttin some real effort into my next submission!
thanks for the review!
Rated 1.5 / 5 stars October 27, 2009
eehh
Find a more original idea, I'm not meaning to be harsh but if I waned to play bejewled I would just play bejewled, A reskinning of the game while a fun project to flex your coding muscles is fine. But that doesn't necessarily make it newgrounds worthy.
Rated 0 / 5 stars October 27, 2009
deficient in all departments
artistry, needs work.
Coding is beyond needing work, hell I've programmed better in Qbasic after minimal time spent with the language.
sound? what sound, artistry is still bad, oh did I already mention that? well it needed restating.
And to summarize, you have momentum when you jump! you continue to move forward despite the fact that you have in fact gained height. I'm not sure what you are expecting by resubmitting this piece.
Rated 1.5 / 5 stars October 26, 2009
needs some sort of perspective
the animation was kinda bad, the music works out i guess. Although I'd be concerned that mission impossible would be too played out.
However the game has no perspective, prior to opening the door going east leads to a window, however after attempting to open the door it leads to a portal.
This only serves to confuse the player. and destroy any handle they had on the game world.
Rated 0 / 5 stars December 16, 2008
deficient in all departments.
A good flash in my opinion relies on both content and animation, sadly your flash was lacking in both. there never really was any animation, and the images tended to bounce around a little bit.
Also what was that bird thing that stabbed patrick in the end?
just something random
Rated 1.5 / 5 stars December 16, 2008
maybe get another voice actor
probably the best thing you could have done for this would be to have a friend (or yourself) do another voice for bill murray. while I know it wouldn't be the best impersonation, it might just be better than microsoft sam.
Rated 3.5 / 5 stars July 27, 2008
pretty good.
I think that the flash did a decent job of capturing some of the emotion behind the creation of the song. however this comment is less about the author or his work and more about the people writing reviews.
It seems like newgrounds reviews are rapidly increasingly turning into vapid hrose-shit. take for instance "this is the best song ever !!!!!!!1111111" illuminating no doubt but the comment leaves me with a feeling of emptiness as if gee I don't know they failed to provide adequate criticism. additionally (and this is a general rule) to all you people out there who think you are some sort of music critic because you've heard like 30 songs in guitar hero 3: you aren't try learning about the bands and their reasons behind making a song.
I really find yendor87's comment legitimately helpful in this regard because not only does he call out all the GH music idiots he also points out that its ridiculous for some stupid trendsters to hijack a sogn about war and death and loss. for the record this song is not about angst, or mommy and daddy not loving you, its about a man who has returned home after watching his friends killed and now finds himself distanced from everyone around him. This is not emo self imposed exile this is a song about real emotional/physical issues.
in the interest of avoiding additional rampant hypocrisy I will now proceed to review the flash itself:
the concept was a decent one, I appreciate you leaving paint it black open to interpretation your format didn't force a specific main character or setting upon us allowing us to project our own emotions onto it, the surest beginnings of good art.
honestly your biggest flaw was that your flash only covered half the song, this could be a result of course limitations so don't think its a personal problem.
Let me stress that a 7 is in no way mediocre it is merely a way of saying that it was decently better than average and something that held my attention and interest.
in short: you unlike a large number of the reviewers have garnered my respect.